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My first and sadly only kiss happened when I was in third grade. It was at Shannon Hine's birthday party. I was extremely nervous when I arrived because Shannon Hines was my crush. The first time I saw her I was in awe of her dark, brown long hair and chestnut, soft skin. I always daydreamed of us together. Every time I would see her at the party I would run away somewhere else. But she would always seem to pop in the same place I was. When it was time for Shannon to blow out her candles on her cake, I decided to hide in the closet. But someone saw me trying to hide and I had to come with rest of the kids and watch Shannon blow out her candles. I got a piece of cake and sat alone. Soon the kids started to play party games. I decided to join in. The first game was hide and seek. I decided to hide in, of course, the closet. While in the closet, Shannon entered the closet, we started at each for the longest time and then out of the blue she kissed me. She said nothing and left the closet. Soon the game and party was over. I was still never able to talk to Shannon even after the kiss. She and a year later she moved to San Diego. I was never able to tell how her I felt. It is still one my greatest regrets. Shannon Hines, my crushed licked me back and I was too scared to say anything to her. But I will always remember for my first kiss.